英诗汉译 I Think I Should Have Loved You Presently by Edna St. Vince

对我， 这是一首比较难翻译的诗。 我不敢说我翻译得对。  欢迎讨论。

I Think I Should Have Loved You Presently by Edna St. Vincent Millay   I think I should have loved you presently, And given in earnest words I flung in jest; And lifted honest eyes for you to see, And caught your hand against my cheek and breast; And all my pretty follies flung aside That won you to me, and beneath your gaze, Naked of reticence and shorn of pride, Spread like a chart my little wicked ways. I, that had been to you, had you remained, But one more waking from a recurrent dream, Cherish no less the certain stakes I gained, And walk your memory’s halls, austere, supreme, A ghost in marble of a girl you knew Who would have loved you in a day or two.

我想我没准儿很快爱上你by Edna St. Vincent Millay 翻译： 高兴   我想我没准儿很快爱上你, 对你诚恳地讲话而不是躲闪回避； 并且抬起诚实的双眼给你看， 让你用手在我的脸颊和胸前游弋； 并且把所有的娇柔矫揉造作一并收起 即使它们曾为我赢得了你， 并任你上下凝睇， 去掉保留，撇掉自尊， 平摊开来， 让我娇嗔的样子一览无余。 如果我早就这样做， 我们不会分离， 但我再次被从类似的梦中唤起， 过去那些教训绝对不能忘记， 这样， 我从你记忆的殿堂走出， 冷静， 高傲地， 如大理石雕像的幽灵， 那个你似乎了解的女孩， 她没准儿一两天后会爱上你。

 这是一首讲爱情的诗。  即使在英语世界， 人们在分析作者的本意时， 也有两种猜测。 一种是男人抛弃女人， 另一种是女人抛弃男人。  后一种见解是少数， 我只见过一篇文章。见： http://www.pipsqueakery.net/poetry-thursday-edna-st-vincent-millay-and-the-sassy-love-sonnet/  但我的分析与此文章相近， 因此按这一思路作的翻译。 我把这一翻译放在这里以期引起讨论。