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Love That Cat又有新的版本了

(2007-10-19 20:17:04) 下一个

亲爱的同网朋友,我最近一直在改我的故事,我的Love That Cat又有新的版本了。这次的修改是历史性的,我将原来的84 verses的长故事,分成6章,每一章讲一个相对独立的小故事。这样一来,孩子们读起来轻松些,章与章之间能有个break停顿,将来还可以在这些地方配上插图。

过两天,我再贴新的版本。下面是改的几个verses

(old)

I named the new cat Mimi.

She would be my best friend.

A good time together,

We would happily spend.

(new)

I named the new cat Mimi.

She'd be my best friend, I knew.

We'd happily play together.

I'd be her best friend, too!


(old)

I went to her round plate.

A bit of cat food,I took.

I pretended to eatit.

She came closer to look.

(new)

I went to Mimi's plate and

Took some cat food, with a smile.

I pretended to eat it.

She stared at me for a while.

(old)

Let's solve the mystery.

Mimi made up her mind.

Behind the big mirror,

A clue, she went to find.

(new)

Mimi made up her mind

Let's solve the mystery now.

She went behind the mirror.

I heard her sharply say,"Meow!"
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