大娃和小娃写故事游戏

这个写作游戏适合家里有多个娃，年龄差不多。几个娃一起重写同一个故事。Retelling the story using your own words. 这个游戏适合初学写作的小学娃。

对于非写作娃来说，写作是一件孤独的苦差事，要一个人在那儿磨笔尖，编想情节，锤炼词句。小娃喜欢做热闹的事，耐不住一个人冥思苦想。就算写出来，也是独自表达，缺人交流。

如果像我家里有语言表达障碍的IEP娃，好好说话都是天生弱项，更加不会自己主动去写作。越不写越不会写，越不会写就越不想写，由此进入怪圈。还有一种天赋论，认为写作是天赋，有些人没有天赋，怎么写也不会是作家。这话也对，写作和数学一样极其依赖天赋。但还有另外一面，大多数人天生不会成数学家，但也需要做数学题，大多数人天生不会成作家，同样也需要练笔。

这个写作游戏适合多娃家庭，几个娃同时写一个故事。游戏是这样，先在网上找一篇短小的故事，可以是寓言或童话，一开始故事不要太长，最多一百字。然后和娃一起写一份提纲outline，五六个词语，概括故事的开头，中间和结尾。然后把故事原文藏起来不能再看。只给娃出示提纲outline, 游戏规则就是要完全用自己的话重新写这个故事。不需要改变故事情节，但讲故事的词语和句式要用你们自己的。

对小娃说，你们写的句子必须有vivid details, 你们的用词和句子尽量 be creative。娃们写几个故事之后，提高一点难度，要每个娃在故事中添加至少一个或两个自己新创的情节，可以是人物动作，表情，对话，心理活动，场景描述。还可以比较谁创造的情节更加贴合原故事并有趣。

游戏场景经常是这样的，大娃如果想出一个合适的词语，小娃就不能再用同一个词，要锤炼另外一个生动的词，如果小娃想出一句新颖的句型，大娃也不能再用，要另辟蹊径。这样激励娃锤炼词句，增强笔力。

对表达有障碍的娃，重写的故事不要太长，一开始动笔写两段就好。也不要催他快写，要给表达困难的娃充分的时间慢慢想，慢慢写。有的时候，表达障碍的娃想词慢，他想的词被小娃先抢了去，有点沮丧，我会鼓励写得慢的娃，可以再想想，一定会有更生动的词从脑子里蹦出来。

在这个游戏中，写作再不是一个人冥思苦想，而是几个孩子脑力激荡，一起表达。往往是一个娃写一段，自感得意的读出来，另一个娃听了夸好，但他也不服气，觉得自己加的一段情节是前一个娃没有想到的。这是集体创作最佳气氛。

小娃的拼写不行，为了给小娃们增添写作愉悦感，我可以做秘书，小娃口述我笔录，把小娃的原话一字不漏的记在纸上。在记录小娃讲的四五句话之后，我会和小娃一起看，原话中的有语法错误要修改吗？能不能把句子写的更精简？词语能替换更生动的吗？句子和句子之间意思通顺吗？

在和小娃重新检视她的原句后，我和小娃会重新写一遍，她把正确的拼写誊抄一遍，没必要让小娃冥思苦想拼不出的词，多增加写作痛苦感。把写作最愉悦的部分给小娃多体验，那就是创作，幻想别人没有想到过的情节，从大脑中搜索别人没有用过的词语，欣赏自己的独创性。

鼓励娃妈们，哪怕娃天生表达障碍，也不要沮丧，一开始我家的娃，四年级也只能拿笔写两三句，公校老师不逼他，他每次在学校的作业真是三句话。每个娃都有努力提高自己的潜力，我不相信我家娃就是写三句的潜力。学校没有让他足够的努力。通过我家里练写作游戏，现在娃可以写上五段。

这是家里大娃前几天写的，他从之前的学校作文三句话，就做这个游戏进步写到了五段。 故事原文是网上找的。大娃重写这个故事。
The Ant and the grasshopper
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In a grassy meadow one summer's day, a grasshopper was bounding from place to place, chirping and singing to his heart's satisfaction.

An ant came across, dragging a kernel of corn to his den. The grain was so enormous that the ant was pushing and pulling very hard.

"Why not take a rest and have a chat with me?"
" I am stacking up my food for the winter " said the ant " and I advise you do it as well. "

" Why worry about winter ?" The grasshopper turned up his nose " You haven't any sense at all. We do have a large amount of food in the pasture. "

The ant kept his tail. Having seen the ant not following his words, the grasshopper turned back to the ant as if the ant was not worth noticing.
When the snow froze the pasture, the grasshopper found himself dying because of starvation.

Meanwhile the ant's family were sharing the harvest of their hard work. Then the grasshopper knew that the one who did not prepare for the days of necessity is the one who has no sense.
同样的故事，家里的小娃也写了一篇，用不同的句子写，小娃更爱加上她想象的情景，她口述我记录

In a pasture one summer's day, a grasshopper was leaping around, chirping and singing his most cheerful song. " Summer is a perfect time to play " said the grasshopper pleasantly.

An ant walked by, carrying one piece of corn to his burrow with great effort. The grasshopper gave the ant a quick glance.
" How do you do!" He greeted the ant " It is a fine day, isn't it ? Why do you care to work in the field instead of chatting with me?"

"I am busy collecting corn for the winter" The toil made the ant out of breath but he managed to talk, "For your sake, I think you'd better stock as much food as I do"
The ant's suggestion did not seem to please the grasshopper, he sniffed at the ant disdainfully, " I don't understand why you should bother about the winter. The meadow has a lot of food for us all, eat whenever you like. You don't have to toil and moil in this way. " The grasshopper hurried away impatiently as if it was not worth noting the ant's response. He sang his merrist song again.
Winter finally came. It became bitterly cold. The rain and sleet beated down on the ground. The grasshopper searched from place to place but still failed to find one piece of grain to eat.
The rain froze upon him, covering him with a coating of ice. The grasshopper was trembling because of hunger. The only comforting thought that entered his head was that on so stormy a night the ant would be eating food in their snug den. They would not go out in such weather. The grasshopper realised that he was nearly going to die. He groaned:" It is best to prepare for the days of necessity."