Let the Starlight Burn

Let the Starlight Burn

 

Let the starlight burn

On a dark Friday night

In my pitch black eyes

Is your secret light

 

The waving smoke twisting

At the longed-for site

I scream for the shooting star

At the forbidden height

[舞曼西楼]

金秋君，我是这把它翻成中文，也许能帮助您理解？谢谢

让行星之光燃烧
在这黑暗的星期五晚上
在我漆黑的眼睛里
映着你神秘的目光

蜿蜒的烟波缠绵着
那个渴望到达的地方
我在被文明禁止的高处
呼唤着那颗发射的彗星

[独立金秋]

Thanks for your speedy answer. Maybe, I didn't state my questions clearly. I would like to know:

1. What is "the waving smoke"? What are you refering it to?

2. What is "the longed-for site"? Is it a country, place or something in your mind?

I believe that you have specific meanings for these expressions in your mind. However, it is difficult for readers to understand. That's why I have questions for you.

Still, I appreciate your poems and enjoy reading them.

Have a nice day.

[舞曼西楼]

金秋君好！您的表扬，我当之有愧。
周五没什么特殊的意义，一般周五is time for bad behaviors
Is用动词会好些。比如说sparkle, twinkle...
waving smoke 指扭曲的。。。
longed-for 指渴望到达的。。。

这首诗是特指的，所以不知道所指，就比较难懂：）

[独立金秋]

能用英文写诗，足见舞曼的英文水平之高。 我有几处不明白，请诗人示下。

为什么是周五的夜晚？有特别的意义吗？
Is your secret light 里的 Is 如果用一个动词是否会更好？
The waving smoke 是指什么？
the longed-for site 又是指什么？

别嫌我笨啊！