同博们,我的I am Mei Ling (1) 又全部更新了。最近一段时间,我又对它进行了多次的修改。一个重大的改动的地方,是我让Mei Ling长了一岁,从kindergarten 变成了grade one的学生,如Mei Ling只要六岁的话,显得有点太聪明了,现在我让她是七岁。另一个重大改动的地方,是有一些比较难的词、小孩可能不知道的词,我放弃不用,改用其它的词。考虑到二、四行压韵和每一段四行的音节syllable数要相同或相近,词的选则上受限制较大。
举几个修改的例子,
(79) (old)
It was my very second day
In Canada, with Mom and Dad.
When I woke up in the basement,
I felt inexplicably bad.
Inexplicably 一词较抽象,以前之所以选用它,是因为它有5个音节,in·ex·pli·ca·ble,四句话的音节数就都是8。这次,我把它换掉了。
(new)
It was myvery second day
In Canada,with Mom and Dad.
When I wokeup in the basement,
I, Mei Ling,felt terribly bad.
(96) (old)
We quickly walked out of the dark room.
A baby murmur, I clearly heard.
I knew there was a small baby here.
Last night, a baby's crying occurred.
以前为了和heard压韵选用了Occurred一词,但此词小孩不大用。
(new)
We quickly walked out of the dark room.
I saw a small baby, with delight.
I knew there was a small baby here.
I heard a baby's crying last night.
(99) (old)
Unexpectedly, she fell down.
Mom and I stood worryingly.
The baby slowly stood up and
Even came happily to me.
Worryingly和me虽然压韵,但不理想。
(new)
Unexpectedly, she fell down.
Mom and I worryingly stood.
The baby slowly stood up and
Came to me as fast as she could.
(165) (old)
At long last, the snow stopped.
A minute, I couldn't wait.
I put my winter coat on.
I was first out the gate.
A minute, I couldn't wait.一句倒装。
(new)
At long last, the snow stopped.
I couldn't wait anymore.
I put my winter coat on.
I was first out the door.
(132) (old)
The big dog slowly got up,
Swaggeringly, coming to me.
I was so terrified that
At once, I started to flee.
Swaggeringly一词,我很喜欢,放在这里很形象、生动。但小孩不大用它,只好忍痛放弃了。
(new)
The dog's tail impatiantly shook.
He slowly stood, coming to me.
I was so terrified that
At once, I started to flee.