No Big Deal

No Big Deal!


1.
I really felt like if I was a trampoline that have always been jumped on. Me and my parents were going skiing. They said Julia was going too. Uh-oh. That brainy-teaser was BIG grouble to me – and I mean it. Uh-oh, Uh-oh…Uh-oh.


2.
Aaa! Ow! Oof, Eeeeeeee! Uhhh!... It was really hard getting up from falling down. I was really impatient. I threw my skiing poles, screamed and yelled and sometimes even cried.

3.
I kept on saying to myself that everything bad wasn’t a big deal. Falling, no big deal. Tumbling across the snow, no big deal. Waaaaa! Ahh! Wwwaaa!!! Hit on the head. Hit on the head!!

4.
By the time my head was hit, I cried again, jumping upward, screamed and dropped my honey mustard nachos. We ran into the locker room, got ready and went home. I made a big racket in the car. Uh-oh, Uh-oh…Uh-oh.

The End.



老师评语：

This is great Tony. I really like the way you numbered your scenes.I won’t share it, because I don’t want to hart Julia’s feelings – but it’s that good.