教儿子学古诗，绞尽脑汁，如何翻译这首词？

由于儿子学中文，这两天读了岳飞的《满江红-写怀》，我顺口说出了“三十投资尘与土，八百万豪宅拍不出”，恨不得“驾长车，踏破华尔黑街。壮志饥餐精英肉，笑谈渴饮骗子血”。大不了，“待从头、收拾旧包袱，回天朝。”

扯远啦，言归正传，儿子学中文，有一篇关于岳飞小时家境贫寒买不起纸笔而用沙盘练字的故事。儿子问我知不知道中国古代百战百胜的将军。我说当然知道，难道你不记得我和你四年前到过“岳王庙”吗？我翻出了几年前我俩在岳飞铜像前拍的照片。岳飞威风凛凛地站在大厅中央，背后是他流转千古的诗篇《满江红 - 写怀》。岳王庙中的《满江红》是草书，不宜读懂。

为了让儿子更深刻地理解岳飞，我和女儿一起把《满江红》翻成了英文。虽然参照了一些已有的译文（ http://www.crazyenglish.org/zhuantiyingyu/duanyujiangjie/20081014/24046.html ），但有许多地方不满意。请各位大虾指正。

n ù f ā ch ō ng gu ā n ，

怒发冲冠 ,

My raging hair pushes off my helmet,

p í ng l á n ch ù , xi ā o xi ā o y ǔ xi ē

凭栏处、潇潇雨歇。

Grasping the fence, pounding thunderstorm has ceased.

T á i w à ng y ǎ n

抬望眼，

Lift my gaze and look to the frontier,

y ǎ ng ti ā n ch á ng xi à o

仰天长啸，

And I roar towards the sky,

Zhu à ng hu á i j ī li è

壮怀激烈。

Great ambitions boil inside my chest.

s ā n sh í g ō ng m í ng ch é n y ǔ t ǔ

三十功名尘与土 ,

Time flies, thirty years’ achievements and glory are already dust and soil;

b ā qi ā n l ǐ l ù y ú n h é yu è

八千里路云和月。

Defending my country, I have marched eight thousand li with clouds and moon.

m ò d ě ng xi á n

莫等闲、

Do not idle away your days,

B á i le sh à o ni á n t ó u

白了少年头，

By the time a young man’s hair turns white,

k ō ng b ē i qi è

空悲切。

Regret would have come too late.

J ì ng k ā ng ch ǐ

靖康耻 ,

The nation’s shame in the year of Jing Kang,

Y ó u w è i xu ě

犹未雪。

Is yet to be wiped away.

Ch é n z ǐ h è n

臣子恨，

The hate towards the enemy as a minister and citizen,

h é sh í mi è

何时灭。

When can it end?

ji à ch á ng j è

驾长车 ,

Let us drive our chariots,

t à p ò h è l á n sh ā n que

踏破贺兰山缺。

To crash the He-Lan mountain pass.

zhu à ng zh ì j ī c ā n h ú l ǔ r ò u

壮志饥餐胡虏肉，

Fighting with enormous will, we feast on invaders’ flesh when hungry;

Xi à o t á n k ě y ǐ xi ō ng n ú xi ě

笑谈渴饮匈奴血。

Laughing and chatting, we quench with Xiongnu’s blood when thirsty.

d à i c ó ng t ó u

待从头、

Let us start and wait for the day

sh ō u shi ji ù sh ā n h é

收拾旧山河，

To take back all our lost land and rivers,

ch á o ti ā n qu è

朝天阙。

And report our final victory to the Heavenly Palace.