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HOME WITHIN EACH IMAGINATION (图)

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HOME WITHIN EACH IMAGINATION He sleeps with his heart open letting the ocean waves rock his little boat back n'forth n'back like falling asleep in lover's bosom . . . How big the heart can be! What a roar the blood makes! As the day recedes the shadow of Self stretches long like any memory left on earth sprouting backward deeper and deeper into a blue heart . . . The story of Love is a white dove fighting the harsh wind over the oceanic chaos flying towards a sound softly calling its name in Mandarin, English Farsi, Hebrew . . . Or the language of dream with its liquid textuality tangible & transparent bringing the one afar closer and closer . . . the words float, bleed dancing . . . Someone sleeps with his ears open listening to the ocean's pulse ::october '05
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影云 2005-10-29 10:34:56 回复 悄悄话 depending on how the poem is translated . .. .
LTG 2005-10-29 10:31:08 回复 悄悄话 i see....

i am wondering if the four-character phrase sounds too archaic....'cause the rest of the poem is in plain speech, so to speak....
影云 2005-10-28 21:07:52 回复 悄悄话 置 more match the meaning of "within"
知凡 2005-10-28 19:45:26 回复 悄悄话 至幻如归！！有过程在又有境界在，比较好！
影云 2005-10-28 17:11:43 回复 悄悄话 置幻如归:)

周末好！！
LTG 2005-10-28 16:30:22 回复 悄悄话 至幻如归［？？］

＂幻＂好像不应该是主语吧：）

周末好！！
知凡 2005-10-27 22:53:04 回复 悄悄话 幻想里归家。。。
影云 2005-10-27 22:11:38 回复 悄悄话 but
but
but heart opens
dream widens
.
.
.
.

:)
LTG 2005-10-27 22:07:14 回复 悄悄话 :))

sleep well.....remember to close your eyes, ears, etc...

:))
影云 2005-10-27 22:03:45 回复 悄悄话 i love it tooo;)finally i can sleep well
a lot of fun with words . . .
LTG 2005-10-27 21:58:39 回复 悄悄话 yy: 幻至如归

this one is really good!!!!

thanx!!!!!!
影云 2005-10-27 21:52:17 回复 悄悄话 幻至如归
LTG 2005-10-27 21:32:11 回复 悄悄话 now, you are making me "think" again.....:)

but i really like what you both got so far.....enjoy them!!!!

知凡 2005-10-27 21:26:35 回复 悄悄话 translation needs different approaches....sometime you have to add words, other times you can replace or create new words in order to "match" the other version....

让文字舞起来，又是高难度:))
知凡 2005-10-27 21:20:10 回复 悄悄话 “每个想像创造里感觉像家”是我的直译，重点是需要有想像力，创造力，“梦幻”好像不能涵盖，英文每个单词含义丰富，中文翻译起来需要变换或许能达到良好的效果。。。
影云 2005-10-27 21:17:18 回复 悄悄话 i know that image, but hard to put it into chinese ;)
LTG 2005-10-27 21:14:44 回复 悄悄话 yy: 乡幻???

not sure.....it changes the image.....

zf: 我越来越对正反词没有辨别力了。。。

don't worry....that means you are thinking too hard :)

translation needs different approaches....sometime you have to add words, other times you can replace or create new words in order to "match" the other version....

影云 2005-10-27 21:10:35 回复 悄悄话 梦幻之乡
LTG 2005-10-27 21:08:32 回复 悄悄话 i almost titled the poem " i feel like home in each imagination".....

hope that helps.....

知凡 2005-10-27 21:05:25 回复 悄悄话 the rhythm of breathing 。。。(这个翻译的难度有点大。。。)

很轻柔的但很“生”的感觉，像是海浪，又像是呼吸，像“爱”像“家”的感觉，好难哦:))

我发现中文翻译其实很难译出原文的韵味，因为每个人的语言习惯就像是自己的个性，再试几次也很难还原。。。

噢，对了，这首诗让我感觉到“love is serene and calm......”
平静中的不平静，不平静中的平静，天，我越来越对正反词没有辨别力了。。。
影云 2005-10-27 21:02:19 回复 悄悄话 乡幻???
影云 2005-10-27 20:55:27 回复 悄悄话 welcome;)

okay, let me think about it :)
LTG 2005-10-27 20:51:18 回复 悄悄话 i am breathing in your translations.....

:)

thanks, fellow bloggers!!!!

i am wondering that the title can be approached differently.....

"Home" here can also mean "feel like home"....mmmmmm.....this is a hard one...
影云 2005-10-27 20:42:56 回复 悄悄话 家居于幻想

他已入眠
心还在敞开
让海浪
轻摇他的小船
来~来~回~回~
如在爱人怀里
入睡

心可以多大！
血可以怎样沸腾！

白日已逝
“自己”的影
逐渐拉长
如留在土地上
任何回忆
向过去发芽
一点一点
深入
那颗蓝色的
心
。。。


爱的故事
是一只白鸽
抗拒着
来自狂啸的困扰
凛冽的风
朝那以汉语，英语，
法西语，希伯来语
轻柔的呼唤
飞去
。。。

或许 梦的语言
以它流溢
可感 透明的质地
将远方的人
一点一点带到
眼前。。。文字
飘浮，血液
起舞。。。

有人已入眠
耳 仍在张开
倾听海的
脉搏
LTG 2005-10-27 20:22:19 回复 悄悄话 oh, "Farsi" is not Persian.....it's spoken in the Mid-east, i think....
LTG 2005-10-27 20:17:02 回复 悄悄话 hi guys!

good evening!!!

:)

ZF, glad you noticed the rhythm of breathing in this poem....i am sure we can capture it in Chinese after some attempts :)

thanx....

cheers to you all!!!!
知凡 2005-10-27 20:08:11 回复 悄悄话 《家在各自的想像中》

睡时
他的心敞开
任海浪
摇荡他的小舟
来回
起伏
像坠落在
爱人的胸怀入梦
. . .

一颗心可有多大！
血液可发出怎样的鸣响！

白日远去
自身的影子
伸长
像一些记忆
留在土壤
向内生长
深深
深进蓝色的心房
. . .

爱的故事
是一只白鸽
搏击混乱的海上
恶劣的风
朝一个声音飞翔
温柔地唤着它的名
用各种语言：
中，英
波斯，希伯来
. . .

或梦的语言
以液体的质地
可感、清晰、透明
带近远方的人
越来越近
. . .文字
漂浮，血
舞蹈. . .

有人睡时
他的耳张开
倾听着海的脉搏


[中文很难译出读到的那种可呼吸的感觉。。。]
影云 2005-10-27 19:58:27 回复 悄悄话 Love this poem !!!

Beautiful, tranquil, and meditative. . .

Reminding me of Hesse who says “home is within ourself”
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