“古句译探”
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"露从今夜白，月是故乡明"
古句英译初探，回忆“德利三步法”

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"露从今夜白，月是故乡明"
古句初探，运用“德利三步法” 思吾友 德利 李唐 两君

Sentences:

01：现有白话句：
Look, the morning dew so clean and white, formed through night,
the moon hung high up tonight, reminds me the home moonlight.

02 初稿：
"Stars falling from sky high become the morning dew, brightens tonight D' moonlight home"

03调整音节音律及韵：成如下句：(就是长了点）

  1. "Twilight fall from sky, tonight, morning dew clean n' white, silver shines in home soft moonlight." -First
  2. "Twilight fall from sky, tonight, morning dew clean n' white, soft moon home, shines with delight."-Optional
  3. "Twilight falls tonight, morning dew white, soft moon home, shines with delight."-
    Concise

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July 14， 2009

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